DL Fowler's Blog

I Hear Voices …

Posted in Bloggers, Contest, Dialog, Emlynd Chand, Inside a Writer's Head, Show Don't Tell, Writing by DLFowler on February 14, 2011

If you’re a writer and you hear voices, that’s a good thing. It’s even better if your readers hear those same voices in your writing.

How do you make your readers hear the voices that echo off the membranes of your brain?  Here’s a sample that impressed me from an entry in Emlyn Chand’s flash fiction contest. It was written by CJ Cook.  

“So who wants to go next?” Ms. Carrol asked, her eyes scanning the crowd.  The children bounced up and down on their knees, their hands bolting into the air as they shouted, “Me, me, me!”

Can you see the whole kindergarten classroom in that short piece of dialog?

I did. I saw it in the bouncing “up and down on their knees”, in the “hands bolting into the air”, and especially in the “Me,me,me!” CJ didn’t elaborate on the toy boxes in their primary colors, the leprechaun sized chairs, or the elfin jackets hanging on hooks along the wall.  And notice, the kids didn’t bounce or shout ‘excitedly.’ I heard their excitement without being told it was there.

25 Best Novels for Psychology Buffs

Posted in Emotions, Favorite Books, Reading, Show Don't Tell, Themes, Writing by DLFowler on February 7, 2011

From my perspective good novels are always about psychology. Personally, I read to engage in relationships with the people (call them characters if you want) who live on  printed pages – or on my iPhone’s screen. So when I recieved a link to an article that lists the 25 Best Novels for Psychology Buffs. I just had to share. There’s some pretty good stuff here.

I like fiction as an avenue for understanding human behavior because novels and short stories let us watch people respond to the challenges of life. It’s not someone saying “Sarah was depressed.” A good author shows us how her body responds to events and emotions … by seeing her face contort or her body tense up we can feel what she feels. It is by feeling that we truly understand. After all, the brain was wired to learn from sensory impulses. We even talk about embracing logic as if we require an emotional connection to facts before we let them into our brain.

Anyway, I thought you’d enjoy the list.  Thanks to Celina Jacobson at http://Careeroverview.com for sharing

Non-violent Psychopath at Risk

Antisocial and narcissistic. Jacob has to avoid both at any cost. The stack of articles he’s pored over the last dozen years say so. They tell him he could have turned down the serial killer path long ago. But early on, he chose to flog the other seven ‘defects’ into submission. Or at least he’d channeled them into a brilliant career as a corporate CEO.   

 Burying the memory of the little girl who lit up his life – she always made him beam, at least until she was taken from him – helped balance his sense of right and wrong. As long as he kept that straight he could make his narcissism seem to be about other people’s wounds. It was easy to rally the troops when he defended another tormented or abused soul. That gave him a sense of belonging to something bigger than himself at the same time he got a taste of the justice he ached for. So he’d make it about something other than himself. Unselfishness at its highest. But if he fixated on his own horror, he’d be a lost soul no one else cared about. And eventually, all he’d become obsessed with balancing the scales any way he could.

 Keeping that stolen little girl buried in the clutter of his memories these last dozen years had kept Jacob on the sociable path. Now meeting Amanda took that option off the table. If their ripples had never met, he’d still be safe. So would the rest of the world. Except for Amanda.

So if he burned Amanda’s violator, would that just be the beginning? Or would justice taste so sweet he’d devour every scumbag who might have robbed him of the little girl he once cherished? A tingle rushed up his spine as he imagined draining the lifeblood from one bastard after another, like a vampire feeding its thirst for survival.

A Terrific Resource for Writers

Posted in Characters, Emotions, Research, Show Don't Tell, Writing by DLFowler on January 17, 2011

I came across a great resource recently and added a link to it in my blogroll (BookMuse – see on left below).  A couple of things right off the bat … the emotions thesaurus and a feature called “Expressing Cardinal Emotions: Male vs Female.”  I plan to use both of these to help with show-don’t-tell issues I run into with my writing.

A great example is the difference between physical reactions of men and women to anger. Men want to hit things, women glare and cross their arms.

While I’m focused right now on show-don’t-tell emotions, Bookshelf Muse also has a Settings Thesaurus with words you can use to show-don’t-tell physical surroundings.  

I recommend you frequent the Muse if you’re a writer.

Anger

Posted in Characters, Emotions, Research, Show Don't Tell, Writing by DLFowler on January 15, 2011

Yet another installment in show-don’t-tell.  Today’s emotion is anger.

Someone really pissed me off the other day. I ground my teeth and wound up the muscles in my back like over-tightened violin strings.

Please post your description of how your body responds to anger.

Disappointment

Posted in Characters, Emotions, Research, Show Don't Tell, Writing by DLFowler on January 13, 2011

I was disappointed the other day. It felt like someone hooked up a vacuum to my navel and cleaned me out.

How does your body react to disappointment. Post a comment here and help  me build a show-don’t-tell library for conveying our characters’ emotions.

Thanks.

Joy

Posted in Characters, Emotions, Research, Show Don't Tell by DLFowler on January 9, 2011

I almost for got about joy. How could that have happened?

This is your second chance to help me gather material for future writing projects. I’m looking for ways to show emotions in my characters.

It’s also my eighth straight day of blog posts. How long will my streak go?

When I feel joy, I don’t have to breathe. Oxygen seems to rush in through my pores. My chin quivers, signaling spasms are about to over take my chest as my whole body heaves involuntarily. Tears rush from behind my eyes to spill out over my cheeks, and all my words stick somewhere between my throat and my tongue.

 So what do your body parts do when you feel joy? Please share a comment.

Betrayal

Posted in Characters, Emotions, Research, Show Don't Tell by DLFowler on January 8, 2011

I’m feeling betrayed. It’s like having a dead body draped over my shoulders, its weight squashing  my lungs so that breathing requires deliberation. It doesn’t come natural. Nothing’s natural. Not even digestion. My stomach acts like it’s defending itself against tainted foreign matter.

Okay, I started the exercise. Can you add your two cents? How does your body respond to betrayal?

Please leave a comment to help me collect material for my writing.  Today I’m looking for descriptions of the kinds of physical reactions people have when they suffer betrayal.  Tomorrow it’ll be something fun – like what does your body do when you’re feeling joy?

Thanks for your contributions to my quest to create great literature.